Thursday, August 20, 2009

Another Wednesday Drabble

Okay, I know it's Thursday, but here's another drabble written for Wednesday Writing Essentials on Gather. It's called "Turn."

“Turn left,” says he.

“How far is it now?”

“Be less if you turned the right way.” His eyes start to frown.

Her fingers tense round the steering wheel as she feels him rejecting her skills, the glorious sparkle of her diamond fading to dusk.

Downhill and slow; musk-scented trees bow low to the engine’s murmur, darkening sky while heaven’s diamonds shine... up above the world so high...

“Turn left,” says he.

And, “How far is it now?”

So he sighs. She stops the car.

“Turn my way.” She turns. He plants a kiss. And rejection flies far far away.

© Sheila Deeth, August 2009

Written for Wednesday Writing Essentials:

• include at least five words of a song
• type one word twice and see if your reader catches it
• use onomatopoeia (language that imitates or suggests the sound to which it refers. Think: cuckoo, gurgle, swoosh)
• use the word "sparkle"

and the theme was something that everyone else can do but someone can't.


Helen Ginger said...

Ahh, I love a story with an unexpected twist at the end.

Straight From Hel

bearmancartoons said...

Far Far...but what is the song?

Sheila Deeth said...

Twinkle twinkle little star...

You can tell I don't know the words to very many songs. My best excuse is I used to sing this one rather a lot when the kids were small.

Helen Ginger said...

Sheila, I'm back today to tell you I gave you the Kreativ Blogger Award. I love coming to your blog and felt you deserved the award.

Straight From Hel

Jack W. Regan said...

I really liked that. Clever!

Donna M. McDine said...

Very well written. I enjoyed this.